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雅思7分作文范文_雅思历年写作范文

2022-03-03 16:21 作者:上海新航道前程留学 浏览: 预计阅读时间7分钟

雅思作文想要获得高分,一方面要有词汇的积累,另一方面也是有一定的技巧和规律的。不妨多看看雅思作文范文,那你知道雅思7分作文范文有哪些吗?下面是小编收集整理的一些雅思7分作文范文,大家一起来看看吧!

雅思7分作文范文篇一:

Task:Some people think getting old is entirely bad. However, others think that life of the elderly in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Sample answer:

Getting old is a natural process that nobody really likes. When you reach a certain age, your physical conditions will inevitably deteriorate, and you may suffer from various kinds of diseases. When you retire, you will feel isolated because your previous work contacts may be all gone, then you may feel useless to the world. Furthermore, when you get too old, you’ll have to rely heavily on the support from others, either physically or emotionally, and your life will become a great pressure to your family and the whole society as well.

For all these bad things about getting old, many people argue that the life of the elderly today is much easier than in the past. In the first place, medical advances nowadays have made it possible for the old people to stay sound and healthy for quite a long while even after they retire. Diseases such as diabetes, hypertension and heart attack which might have inflicted pain on the old people are no longer serious problems for them. Then, with the widespread use of modern communication technology, old people today are no longer isolated from the world. Instead, by using their personal social media, they can always stay in touch with their families and friends, and share with them whatever they find interesting in their life. In this way, they do not really feel lonely or abandoned. Finally, the improved social wealth and pension system have also significantly reduced the pressure the old people pose to their families and communities.

So, I do agree that the old people today are enjoying a much more comfortable life than, say, thirty years ago (not to mention 100). That is why, instead of being worried about their retired life, many people even begin to expect their retirement to come, because they see this as a new beginning of their life. I think, as long as the old people have the right attitude, the modern world has indeed much to offer for their happy, enjoyable and rewarding retired life.

雅思7分作文范文篇二:

Task:Some people think international cooperation has brought benefits to world environment protection, while some people think more benefits have been brought to international business. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

参考范文:

International cooperation is now everywhere: the clothes we wear, the food we eat, the car we drive - all may be the effects of international cooperation. Yet when it comes to issue of which of the two, the environmental protection or the world business, benefits more from international cooperation, opinions vary from one individual to another.

Needless to say, international cooperation has helped a great deal in environmental protection. When dealing with some environmental issues like global warming, we need the joint effort of all countries across the world. Even in face of local issues, the new technology from other countries can be very helpful. When developing the high-speed train in China, for example, a technology called “air cleaner” from Russia is used, which has helped to reduce significantly the air pollution along the railway.

International cooperation has greatly expanded the world business as well. International cooperation can not only increase the productivity but also bring down the costs. It is because of international cooperation that American customers can enjoy the high-quality commodities from China at low prices and vice versa. Meanwhile, if countries work together, they can make their products and services more agreeable to the local people, which in turn will create more markets. For example, Microsoft products are all originally in English and were met with cold eyes 20 years ago when they entered China. It was only after Microsoft cooperated with Chinese programmers and converted the language to Chinese that its products have been widely accepted in China.

It is hard, though, to determine which has benefited more from international cooperation. My immediate response would be that world business is the greater beneficiary. After all, I have seen with my own eyes how the expanded world business as a result of the international cooperation has changed my life. Of course, I am fully aware as well that our environment is becoming better and better thanks to the international cooperation.

雅思7分作文范文篇三:老龄化增长的优缺点

In many countries, the number of elderly people is increasing fast. To what extent do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

Nowadays, owning to the improvement of living condition(这里习惯用复数), people can live much longer than before, which gives rise to the fast increasing number of elderly people. Some hold that this situation will result in a series of problems, such as social burden, population expansion and so on. While others insist that it agrees the development of modern society and brings many advantages. For my part, I take the latter side with(用for) the following reasons: (74words)

点评:开头稍微写的有点长,不过内容写的还不错。属于通过分析两种不同观点,最后阐述自己观点的写法。(此种写法在雅思大作文的第一段比较常见)

美中不足的是倒数第二句的错误比较明显!while是个连词,应该连接句子与句子,所以这里前面不应该是句号。后面agree是不及物动词,不能直接加宾语。

Firstly, elder people(一会儿elderly people,一会儿又elder people,这不是自相矛盾么!!!) are the fortune of our society. They have enough experiences and capabilities which are badly lacked and needed for our youth when dealing with all sorts of problems, they can still do well in their jobs. Especially(前面应该用逗号,然后这里小写) in some professions, such as teacher, doctor, scientist and so on, sometimes (前面应该用句号,然后这里大写)age means the authority and ability. When you see a doctor, do you prefer an elderly doctor with grey hair or a youth without mustache? (77words)

Secondly, elder people(同上) are the happiness of our society. Increasing number of elderly people is also the embodiment of our improving living quality, which shows our society run(应该第三人称单数)to the right and healthy direction, we(前面句号,这里大写) have more chance and time to serve our elderly people, and it’s the happiest time of all our life to accompany with(accompany是及物动词) our parents, grandparents and great grandparents. (63words)

Finally, elderly people are the lubricant of our society. They have good temper and enough patients(应该是patience吧) to do anything, they can help us to intercede(它是不及物动词,而且主要用人作宾语) social disputes, and they make our society much more harmonious which(前面最好有个逗号)makes for the construction of harmonious society.(43words)

正文段综合点评:此篇是典型的5段式作文的写作,正文段构思出三个分论点来证明自己的观点,的确在构思上花了不少心思。但是,这里我想提的是,还是两方面都分析一下会比较好一点。特别这篇文章是问优点多还是缺点多,那么最好是缺点讲一个,然后优点再讲两个。外国人喜欢这样的辩证分析。

其次,总的来说,作者的语言还是挺流畅的。但是似乎标点有问题,该用句号的时候用逗号,改用逗号的时候用句号,这个也要扣分的!

From mentioned above, the advantages of increasing number of elderly people are obvious more than it disadvantages(典型的Chinese English.应该说there are obviously more advantages than disadvantages.). Elderly people are not the burden of our society but the source of fortune, happiness and harmony of our society.(37words)

全文总评:

尽管总的来说语言水平还是很不错的,内容也写得很充实,但缺点是语言方面还是不够细腻。此文7分。

雅思写作7分考生的经验之谈:

雅思写作一直是中国考生的弱项,如何达到雅思7.0分?本文一名考生用自身经验告诉你。

雅思写作对我来说不是强项,写来写去头脑中的原创词汇还是高中学到的那些。所以这里咱们需要先明白一些东西:

很多人喜欢用模板,特别是十天雅思写作的书籍, 如果你的分数要求是6分以下,那你大胆的用,如果想上6分或7分甚至更高,就不要用那么多的模板,就算要用,也要挑与自己水平相适应的,不要挑些看起来很高级的,其实根本没用,反而会让你分数变低。。。 因为考官其实不是讨厌那些模板,他们反感的是高级的模板与你写的文章的语言水平根本不是同一个层次的,写出来的一篇文章里层次相差太大。想想看,读一篇中文的作文,如果每段的开头结尾转折的地方都用些华丽丽的词、文言文、诗句什么的啊,但是接下来却是用最普通易懂的语言,你看了会怎么想呢?

此外,有些人认为写作要拿高分,一定要用上很多高级词汇,以显示自己的高水准,其实不然。大家可以看看剑桥书后面的考官写的范文,其中并没有所谓的高级词汇,都是一些通俗易懂的,大家都认识的单词。但是为什么那种文章就是好呢?仔细读过几遍,你会发现,那些文章写的很通顺,观点阐述也很清晰,说白了,读起来就是很舒服。其实我们也可以做到。别在那些高难度词上纠缠啦,别到时侯用词不当,拼写错误,反而弄巧成拙。我们只要做到,观点表达清楚,用些熟悉的从句,来 1-2个倒装句,再加上恰到好处的连接词,一篇好文章就出炉啦。

所以,最有效的方法是拿别人的高分范文来分析,看他们是怎么开头和过度的。通过阅读其他考生的范文,总结出自己的开头段与中间连接的各种词组、句子结构等等。原因是:不像那些写书的专家,给出的模板看似简单,却恰恰要求你模板以外的文字要特别出众,否则就拿不到高分,而其他考生毕竟是考生,水平和你差不多,用他们的东西更能转化为自己的。

  • Tip1:不要用你自己都不熟悉的单词,不要制造机会让考官扣你分。
  • Tip2:小作文多用些模板,以减少时间;大作文请尽量少用模板,如果要用,请用些没那么多人用的模板。
  • Tip3:外国人喜欢有案例来支持你的论点,所以请多写一些有关你论点的新闻报道或研究数据来作为例子。
  • Tip4:词汇咱们不求多华丽,只要句子结构和连接词用的出彩些,高分也不是问题。

比如:很多人用for example,for instance来举例,其实你可以用according to the lastest research,或like Prof.xxx said in University of NewYork:xxxxx… 这些都是很普通却很有说服力的连接词。而书上模板往往让你背的是:for example,on the other hand等等。

再比如,我自己就从某考生那里借用了一种句型,现在用起来特别爽,很有气势!!

普通的写法:

Even if machine translation were able to eradicate all the language barriers between peoples, learning foreign languages still make sense.

加工后的句型:

Even if machine translation were able to eradicate all the language barriers between people, would there be no point in learning foreign languages? By no means.

  • Tip5:你再怎么不喜欢作文,考前3天请一定要写几篇练练。反正我是考前5天才开始弄作文,读读其他人的、背背句子、自己掐时间写写,不过后面也懒了,只写过度的地方,为了熟悉自己的句型,其他句子脑中过一遍就好了。
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